Ha! I like this. I keep reading it and every time I do, my brain goes into some kind of feedback loop. A classic “which came first” question with a twist.

Other than your cruel abuse-though-overuse of the comma (I recognize a fellow abuser when I see one, and I’m bad, really bad), I think it’s perfect.

Thnx…guilty as charged. I deleted some, commas; head held, in shame.

I didn’t notice the commas, so you either fixed that or I’m such a horrid offender I can’t even see the problem.

St. Peter and reincarnation? Isn’t that mixing religions?

Aside from that theological point, I liked the lighthearted tone to a thoughtful message.

THX, I deleted a few :).

With us passing 7 billion people on the planet, I had this vision of heaven being full and St Peter having to ‘redirect’ some people at the pearly gates…

In my eyes this is really fun and light-hearted, and if there is a serious message behind it then I don’t think I want to discover it. Both of the characters seem to have very genuine, happy-go-lucky personalities (I never thought I’d describe St Peter as happy-go-lucky but there ya go).

By the way I love the little rhyme in your tags =D.

You’re missing a question mark in your first line of speech.
“What’ll you learn” should be “What you’ll learn.”
Semi-colon in the 4th paragraph could be a full colon – reads better. I also think that that sentence should do without the second ‘that’.

I love that this is in the past tense…so the narrator survived their experience to tell the tale. Wonderful little story.
Abby x

Great pacing, nice subtlety, the characters have their own voices. It inspired my imagination, good job!

I found this to be slightly confusing the first time I read, but after going back a second time I realized I kind of like it!

Keep writing, I’d like to see more from you :)