YAY excelently said!!!!

I like it, its different! Not just the words, its really fun to look at! Also I agree with the sentiment, and thank you for the sequel.
And for being friendly. :p

I’ve been re-inspired! You’ve been sequeled.

This is very avant garde, and interestingly crafted. Reminds me of some of the stuff my buddy used to create in his creative writing classes.

I agree with the sentiment that poetry doesn’t need any form. Unless of course, it does.

It’s an interesting balance of art and words. Nice thoughts. And/but (?) I agree with Mr. Perkins on the “Poetry doesn’t need any form. Unless of course, it does.”

this is good

Cool, reminds me of e. e. cummings’s poems.
He wrote poems in a quite unconventional way.

Just look at this one and you’ll understand:
http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15402

I’m not a fan of art poems, personally, just to start things off, so I won’t attach a rating.

Alright, I feel like this is the wrong medium for an art poem, or at least this style of it. You have very little formatting options on this site, and while it did serve your purposes to a degree, I feel as if you could do a better job with a wider range of formatting.

Content-wise, it seems like something I’ve read before, fairly often. Not necessarily bad, but it grates at me for that reason.

see this is good poetry.
this is stuff like ee cummings. it’s original and engaging. it’s my favorite kind of poetry.

While this may not be the ideal place due to formatting restrictions, I think you did what you could with what you had and aced it.

Now that’s a run on sentence.

Hey, great work! Irregular structure done well is a favourite of mine and sadly it’s a rarity. I’d like to see what structural tricks you can do when not constricted.

I like this response, but I feel like writing a non-conventional poem on non-conventional poetry might be a little extreme.

It’s pretty decent stuff, but novelty for the sake of novelty is no better than rhyme schemes because they fit into your rigid definition of poetry

Still, I respect the effort

XD

You, of all people, Gwenita, would do this. I must say that the way it’s written, and the writing, and the piece it’s sequeled after, all fit pretty nicely!

@Quetzi, the reason it was posted in this medium is that it was her response to the discussion in the prequel. This is the only medium for this particular expression.

I’m well aware, and to a degree, I salute that.

It does nothing to change the fact that this medium is ill suited to art poetry.

I have to say though, that if you thought I was saying that all poetry must conform to a standard you missed my point entirely. So hopefully that’s not the case!

This is good, although I do agree that it’s a little overt – remember, a large part of poetry is communicating the point without explaining it to the reader.

Also, I find the concept of poetic convention being “trivial formalities” laughable and indicative of ignorance regarding the evolution of poetry, but I’m not going to mark off for the message – I’m just critiquing the verse.

Whether people liked this or not, this is the commentage I’m looking for, what we’re all looking for: solid praise alongside respectful and tactful criticism. Keep that comin’!

This is kind of nice, I suppose, but speaking as someone who doesn’t particularly know much about poetry – but does know a thing or two about decent writing, generally speaking – I’d like someone who enjoyed this to explain why in a little more depth, because I fail to see why, as John Perkins proclaimed, this could possibly be considered (ghhn) “avant garde.”

Which isn’t to say I necessarily dislike the poem… It just strikes me as… kind of simple, maybe? Is it the idea that something very simple – a specific thought, that we needn’t have such conformist views of poetry or some such – is said in a way that appears complicated or artistic but is, in fact, quite easily digested? That the poetry can be interesting not necessarily because of its content but because of its ability to break the mold and mess with typical formulas? :\

Mostly, this kind of just reminds me that alleged “creativity” can be almost sickeningly self-gratifying and empty, and that, well, you’d never see Robert Frost on Ficly. :p

This would have qualified as avant-garde a century ago. Nowadays, all structural eccentricity falls within the realm of standard poetical constructs – true avant-gardism, these days, is far more concerned with metapoetics than any formatting or grammatical variations.

Interesting and – as already mentioned – “fun to read”. Nicely put together.

Reminds me of the cliche cut and paste ransom notes. Well Done!

You’re so cool. Haha.

I agree, this is fun to read, and extremely creative.

Seal of approval