Okay, so it was a bathroom birth gone wrong, just not hers, if I’m following correctly. I can see what you’re doing here with developing two stories at once, the ‘present tense’ one and the flashback to the original bloody incident, but that paragraph felt dropped out of nowhere. Not sure how, but it seems like it needs some way of setting it apart from the current narrative so it’s less jarring to jump back and forth between the two.
THX 0477