Alas, my inspiration.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N5KwwKRSRwI&feature=related

Fascinating. I’ve got tons of distractions but couldn’t stop reading. It sounds almost like she’s dreaming about suicide and somehow getting colder or dieing in her sleep. Very nicely done.

Mixing fantasy with reality here, I think. You end up not sure what, where, or why.

“They were sweet, yet putrid, like a dead rat crumbled over a fresh baked pie.”
I love this line. I want to use it in a conversation sometime, just to see how the other person reacts. :)

I like it. It has a poetic quality to it. It came off as mystereous and morbid. LOVE that.