This was an interesting piece, I really enjoyed the rhythm, but I found the last line to be a little off? Could just be me!

Fun little poem, a contentedly dead atheist with an eco-conscience. I think I’ve heard the sentiment of the last line before, so I am pretty sure I got what you meant there.

Great! I liked the rhythm too, and the strange almost-there rhyme scheme indeed made it very fascinating to me.

It started out sad and then descended into a more amusing theme – how exactly does an atheist comfort their family before/after death? My favourite was the second paragraph.

Could you make the last line ‘-we’ve just got new clothes’ . It might help with the rhythm issue that Vanessa mentioned.
But still really great. I like it a lot!
Abby x

Thanks for all your comments guys- this is a little bit of a statement of personal philosophy for me, so it’s nice to see that you get it too

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, though- I’m rather loving this site, as it lets me discharge my creative side harmlessly to earth, without harming impressionable persons or animals… ;-)

Hi. I really like this. About the last line, I like it. It may just be personal opinion. When I read it, I thought it was well balanced with the lines:
“I will be recycled, so please- don’t despair.
I’m not really gone, for no-one really goes;”
I think it goes well with the idea of “recycling” (new clothes, new image).
Just wondering, and I could be wrong, but does this poem deal with the concept of reincarnation at all? If so then the last line would also sit well with me for that reason.

Hey Meep, thanks so much for your comments! I don’t really buy into the notion of survival of personality after death,whether by an afterlife or reincarnation of the spirit- I call myself a Hard Agnostic, since we’ll never get the final piece of information we need to settle that definitively- but the atoms that make us up, created in the Big Bang or in the hearts of exploding suns- certainly get reused in other entities and will do for countless trillions of years, so if that’s reincarnation, then…

I’ve no argument with anybody’s philosophy when it comes to this; I think we all have to make our own deal with the universe.

By the way, I know the punctuation in my comment is shonky- please forgive me!

^_ rr

Very enjoyable, and echoes my own thoughts of death.