Aww that’s so sweet and sad! The change in perspective did confuse me a little but let’s say that it reflects the confusion of love and heartbreak. To me, it read almost as poetry although I think the language could have been a little bit better. Heartbreaking =’( Abby x
Aww that’s so sweet and sad! The change in perspective did confuse me a little but let’s say that it reflects the confusion of love and heartbreak.
To me, it read almost as poetry although I think the language could have been a little bit better.
Heartbreaking =’( Abby x
This was good, but if I can give some criticism, it would be to try and make this excerpt more visual, use more words to help the reader feel and see everything that is happening. The piece is lovely and has so much potential!
This was good, but if I can give some criticism, it would be to try and make this excerpt more visual, use more words to help the reader feel and see everything that is happening.
The piece is lovely and has so much potential!
Abby (LoA) 
Dear, Vanessa;