Nice three sentences. Personally, I would have written ‘around IN my body’ and for grammatical purposes, beginning the last sentence with ‘you are’ again – the repetition could work well.
But it’s great as it is. You’ve really exploded into ficly! Congratulations on the feature! You have a wonderful talents for describing emotions so perfectly.
As are your other pieces, this is completely beautiful! Abby x
Abby (LoA)