It’s rare that someone writes a Ficly that could be an epic prologue to a fantastic 500+ page novel. I felt like I was reading a scrolling story, like at the beginning of Star Wars.

Excellent job. Please consider this a great start to a future novel and build on it. Think of your sequels as chapters, not short stories. I’m fascinated by the bloodless whore.

I would suggest capitalizing Legion.

Love it. Thanks for brightening my day!