Awesome setup. I smell sequels!

Critique: “with looks of fear” A) how could they fear the box before they even know what’s in it? B) I think you can rephrase this for the future, because you write ‘with looks of’ a lot, or just extra words like ‘gasps of shock’. The gasps are enough here. Just a note to help you tighten up your form and become even greater!
This story was crazy scary and evil. Bravo!

Oh and, ‘her eyes were glassy’.. whose? See, I inferred whom those eyes must belong to, but you didn’t tell me it was the third woman, so I had to read it twice. :)

Aha, thanks! I’ll have to edit it and fix the mistakes. :)

yay! better!