Very interesting. The blurred confusion of this makes the drunken daze of the protagonist clear to the reader. Another very clever and original entry. I liked how you personified more than one alcoholic beverage and adjusted their speech to suit the nature of the liquor.

Repetition of ‘on my shoulder’ is another cool motif. Like angel/demon, right? whispering in your ear constantly and manipulating your decisions. First line of the last para…should ‘shoulder’ be plural. I’m sort of battling that grammatical issue with myself right now so I thought I’d put it forward. I’m not certain anyway.

Very poetic progression from a gentle start to a violent end. Good layout and paragraph separation. The emotion wasn’t quite so clear in this piece as it is in some of your others but I thought that added well to the blurring of drunkenness.

All the ’and’s in the last sentence make the spiral seem endless. Nice technique. Great writing as always and thanks for entering =)
Abby x

You’re right it’s a plural :) Thanks so much. I think when you’re drunk you experience everything, and therefore, nothing. I’ve been this way a lot recently.