Great plot! Just a few corrections. In the first, second and third paragraphs, you started it off with Jarett creeping forward. Perhaps you could change the second paragraph’s beginning to “He slithered forward” and the third one to “He sneaked nearer” … or something similar to that. Otherwise than that, it was disturbingly gruesome. Keep up the good work, wifey! :D

Kind of depressing for numerous reasons.
1. that the man who was killed was the guy who stole the other characters wife, definitely a sketchy friend.
2. The fact that Jarett had the need to kill to put his mind at ease. Most would say that murder is not the answer.
3. That a friendship was indefinitely lost, way before this even occurred.
4. The girl was totally like Yoko, she broke up the band completely!

Anyways,
good story!
Sorry my comments really aren’t of any help but I enjoyed it nonetheless!!

thank you all(:

This is chilling… really good at showing what each person is thinking and what would make you become a murderer… but I don’t know if it’s just me, I was kind of confused about which was which, since you kept saying “the man did this and the man did that” and it seemed like they were supposed to be two different people…

yeah, i know. i confused myself. xD