Very graphic, heavy and sad Red, raw and cold.

Maybe drop “the” from your second paragraph, or add something more “The ____ blood” to make it work better for you.

Your line about is the god’s head still full of ideas and his body never rotting gives me some sense of hope, but very little.

You got an emotional response from me, well done.

It’s a casual murder, almost bored. Ho hum, we slice and stab, all in a day’s work. Nothing to see here folks, just a dead god, just the end of the last magick, move along. :) Where’s the emotion!? I am unsatisfied. The smile is plastered on, the smile is not happy, more maniacal. Cold, I guess, but more unsatisfying than heavy or sad.

I get that this challenge is encouraging this exact kind of story, and you did a fabulous job, but the very nature of the writing this challenge asks for is grating on my nerves.. :)

My apologies, Elsha— my latest challenge asks much and gives little. The tone of almost any story entered is likely to be… less than uplifting. It’s not my usual style but I’m in a dark mood.

As for this story, I say good job. It feels bitter, resigned and yet entirely without remorse.