sad, so very wrong, and you mixed in the lines as part of a classic show and a juxtaposition. It almost feels like cheating.. :) This whole piece is gritty, cold, and disheartening. It shocks the system of the reader, or at least this reader.

I like the changes that you’ve made to this. I wasn’t particularly able to follow the original but, in this version, it’s much clearer what is happening.

@ElshaHawk: It isn’t cheating, but I will be changing the rules slightly the next time I post a similar challenge! The required lines here could be replaced with almost anything else and the story wouldn’t be much affected.

lol, it just feels like that, but clearly no rules are broken at all. I say there is a line and it was toed! :P I am not the judge here, you are! The fact that they could be replaced with anything is the reason why I feel it pushes the boundaries. But we all need boundaries pushed sometimes.

@ August. Not true, I respected your challenge. The lines you wanted are specifically chosen to ride with the story. I heard one reality in one ear, and mine forming in another. I’m utilizing the “Music (Movie) brings back old memories” theme. I can’t watch the movie I was watching back then, but your lines worked well. Also, sometimes there really is a Hollywood life, right? A lot of Hollywood movies are exactly what Elsha states, " gritty, cold, and disheartening. It shocks the system", and that I will take as a compliment.

@32 Squared: I don’t see the relationship between the selected lines and their placement within the story. If there’s some sort of allegory at play, it escapes me. That wouldn’t surprise me: allegory usually does escape me.

That is my favorite play of all time. I cry. Forever.

Oh, I forgot about this challenge. Good story nonetheless.