This seems a little redundant. Betty obviously wants to shatter this other woman’s life so she can come out on top…but is that it? How does she do it? What happens next? Who, what, when, where, and how?

I was aiming for a “who is Betty and how does she feel” angle rather than an expository Betty-centric one. At the same time I was attempting to hold within the bounds set by the original. I realize this may not be the height of creativity, but I’ve always found character studies more intriguing that narrative tales of their goings-on.

@LittleSecrets: You can write a sequel too, make your’s extravagant and wordy instead, the opposite of redundant.

@southsideof10, Don’t defend what you’ve written, there’s no need or reason to, this Ficly is great. I wouldn’t call it “redundant”, it’s just the musing’s of an obsessive mind making her case for her own obsession. Not “redundant” at all, more of a character clarification?

I read this in the voice of Kristin Chenoweth.
You use a lot of card-game metaphors.
I think the redundancy fit the story well. Obsessive people are redundant by nature.