She went insane.. that is cold. The bottom just drops out of this story. The counting in her head feels distant to me, it is methodical and not what I would be doing if in an accident. I guess that’s where you veered from the memory scene to the psychiatric ward. All of these entries throw me.

Ha yeah I get your confusion.

I made a few small changes

I missed your writing, Stud.

Oh, so hard. Just a terrible end really. The beginning’s not much better.
The dialogue is perfect. Short, simple and unembellished.