This is great.
I love how she’s pondering suicide but the way she words it that she can jump out of the way in time was really great.
She’s torn between everything and I love how you’ve perceived that.
I can see it all in my mind, great imagery of the line and how she tries to stay away from it.
Oh and the idea with the ring box was creative, how she’s just looking for an excuse for herself to get on those tracks.

awesome story. :)

This is great.
I love how she’s pondering suicide but the way she words it that she can jump out of the way in time was really great.
She’s torn between everything and I love how you’ve perceived that.
I can see it all in my mind, great imagery of the line and how she tries to stay away from it.
Oh and the idea with the ring box was creative, how she’s just looking for an excuse for herself to get on those tracks.

awesome story. :)

Well written! My heart actually started pounding toward the end. I was really put into the character’s head. Great job!