Nice entry. It’s subtly haunting and dark. Very much like a horror movie that would leave you on the edge of your seat the whole time.

Hardly subtle, but I like it. Creepy, dark, simple.

A few technical points:
(Yes, I am that person.)

1. I only reject food, it is repulsive. I hunger for escape.
2. I feel the blood pool in my nails and when my eyelids open, I molest my open wounds.
3. I see nothing, I feel no pain.
The grammar in these lines is wonky. That comma should either be a full stop or a semi colon. It sends my brain off kilter. I know you want it all in one sentence but it would still feel cohesive seperated by a colon of some sort.

The girls are diligently behind me.
You can’t be diligently. Also diligently is a weird word. It doesn’t match its surroundings.

Other than that I think it’s brilliant. The feel of the piece is fantastic. And it’s stuck between poetry and prose, much like the protag is stuck between two people, two minds.

creepiest entry i’ve read so far. great job

This creeped the hell out of me. I keep having to check behind me.

Maybe I’ll leave the light on tonight…