First of all, this is an awesome sequel, and whatever you think about how ineffective your creative writing teacher is, he did help you these past few months. So ha.
Secondly, i hope this headquarters has some more information for them! this cat and mouse game has been craftily planned and it’s time to get ahead of this 3 fingered man!

Tense and taught. Minor tense flub in the middle, the sentence about not having known the whole story. Might read better with a different word to replace the second ‘man’ towards the end, since I think you are referring to two different people. I like his introspection about his companion in the adventure.

I just wanna point out that my teacher influenced none of this, ha. This is pretty much off raw talent…

oh, patting yourself on the back there, are you? hmm interrogation..how to sequel…