I like the story in that it could be interpreted that either one could be unable to see reality. It’s a good story, effectively written.
  Wet blanket time: Are you certain that prurient is the word that you really meant to use? The only other beef that I have is with the presentation generally. If the first line of your paragraphs is not indented, then inserting blank lines between paragraphs assists with readability. You do have the characters available to do that.
  Otherwise, you should consider indenting your first lines. You don’t have the characters available for that which would mean revisions.

Thanks for your comment. I was writing on my phone so formatting went down the drain :). As for ‘prurient’, it was a blip, I was thinking about something else at the same time.

Your title is beautiful, and it plays well into the story, it seems that you wrote a story based on the meaning.

On Ficly, since there is a character length, certain forgiveness needs to be recognized in structure. I would prefer a better story, than a better structure, that all comes later.

Your Ficly has structure without boundaries; it can be interpreted many ways, I see two Gods, one very sick.

I would have liked to see where you used the word “prurient”. One of it’s definitions, A restless longing, fits the scene.

Your title is beautiful, and it plays well into the story, it seems that you wrote a story based on the meaning.

On Ficly, since there is a character length, certain forgiveness needs to be recognized in structure. I would prefer a better story, than a better structure, that all comes later.

Your Ficly has structure without boundaries; it can be interpreted many ways, I see two Gods, one very sick.

I would have liked to see where you used the word “prurient”. One of it’s definitions, A restless longing, fits the scene.