So you, so Red.

(a ll to all)

Very dark with an epic feel of madness to it, just a hint of possible meaning behind it all…but mostly madness.

Very nicely done.

I don’t think you need the second comma in the second line. It is indeed very dark. The shortening sentences, increased pace all working up to that last, repeated line. Lots of very interesting techniques going on in there and some very interesting little phrases (like the title) that can be picked out as almost beautiful.

I liked it a lot! Abby x

The protagonist is pushing reality away in defense so as not to face the horrible screaming mother. That’s what I read, anyway, and that is a terrible thing.
But extremely well described.