If you’re interested:

Map of Church
http://g.co/maps/qxt44

History of Church
http://www.bradwellchapel.org/sphistory.htm

Wights
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wights

Haha brilliant stuff! Great use of suspense, just a minor note though, you might want to change ‘use’ to ‘used’. Overall, clear and engaging!

Caught me again, thanks for the eye define!

Not at all what I was expecting, but certainly lays out a situation and direction for the story. Never ceases to amuse me how stories become living things in this medium, how styles and direction shift with each author’s contribution.

Technical point, for me, even whispered dialog should follow the quotation mark rules, but that’s nit picking, isn’t it. Only other thing is that I struggled to find the tone of the monster’s speech, if he was condescending, joking, or something else. With as much as you fit in, probably not room for the little descriptors of speech though, so understandable.

@THX

I know what you mean THX. I formulated this sentence for just that reason:

“I’ve been brained by steers little one. Plus, I don’t like my meat bruised.”

I thought it added a sense of irritable crotchety love? And the fact that the creature had a relationship with the church, maybe to subtle?

I need to work on it a little. Don’t know where though.

Done, I like it much better.

Yep, definitely better. Still feels cramped in the space, perhaps just an inevitable ficly-ism. I like the direction and possibilities though.