Comments on Don't say it!! by Emilou

32 ^2

A first grand submission, congratulations!

In my mind: A Bully, a muddy schoolyard fight of biting words. Oh how bloody consonants fly with fury!

Fantisimo! Bravo! Hooray! The fight is on!
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
THX 0477

I was with it until the last bit. I lost track of who was talking, probably more my fault than yours. With the rest of it being all dialog those two lines of description felt out of place. So, really good job on the first half, then I got lost after the line, though somewhat my own fault on that.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
Emilou

32^2: Thank you!! I’m grinning. :D

THX 0477: I was trying to show who was who as optimally as I could. Non-talking was important to show that, if contrasting. Thank you for your input!
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
ElshaHawk (LoA)

fur? what was in there?! Nicely done, because this challenge is hard!
- Posted almost 8 years ago.