I love the idea, the perspective from the point of view of the zombie. Decent twist that he’s not a classical brain eating zombie.

The paragraph that start, “I trudged down…” is a huge run-on. You may actually have the punctuation right for it to be a compound sentence grammatically, but it’s still way too long. You can get the same effect with a succession of simpler sentences.

You also slip into past tense at the end of the second to last paragraph.

So, technically, so cleaning up to do, but a great idea and feel to it.

Oops, guess I didn’t see this comment!

Anyway, thanks for the feedback! I see what you mean about the run-on and the past tense, and I’ll get right to that, thanks!

Um. I wasn’t really writing about zombies, though… This was, uh, supposed to be from the perspective of a survivor of a natural disaster. :D