I can honestly say I love this story. Normally, I will look back at my stories, and think how awful they are. To bad this one was never viewed.

I have seen it, and I love your epic hero! For all I love it, I do think that maybe it could use a tiny polish here and there-for example, choked, instead of chocked.
I would have almost preferred America being left out of the picture-I had imagined this as something medieval or historical, an epic tale of a knight or some such hero. Hearing a jolt of modern day with no other clear hint to me brought me a bit out of the story for a minute. In any case, consider it-I don’t know the full story arch, and so if it is something important to the plot then ignore my advice!