Maybe break up the paragraphs a little bit to make it more readable, but overall, I like where this is going it could start a good story.

Interesting exposition, but it’s just that. The idea has potential, but the more of that you can slide into dialog or along with some action the better. I know that takes more space than a single ficly allows, but that’s what sequels are for.

Thank you all. This is the start of a planned series. We’ll learn more about the Original Sin project and the Virologists role in it. If everything works out like the image in my head then the effects of this project and the Sandlot Ventures Solution will be the biggest influencers of my fictional universe.