Nice. I understand your point very well. You paint the aura of embarrassment around Jim so eloquently. I also like how Jen reacts at the end. This would be good fodder for a sequel, maybe even a prequel.

I love this, and I’m honored to read it. I like that you didn’t use the words. This is realistic, it has happened in some bar somewhere during open mic night.

Cute ending, and I like the scene. Totally easy to picture this poor guy doing something sweet in the exact wrong place. Fun stuff.