Very well written, I loved how you described Brad’s character. The idea is great, at first I thought he was rushing to the woman for some good times but towards the end I had a doubt because of the baretta. And the last phrase, “a woman who could do anything” has a lot of connotations but the main one I got was this: This woman is sexy as hell and this guy loves her.

I’d love to be proven right or wrong if you wrote a prequel or sequel!

The implications of the secondary details interest me greatly. The wagered money, the combat boots, and the mismatched socks. They all contribute to the sense that the character has dimension and life beyond the glimpse we are given, a like window providing a small image of a larger whole.

The Indian Scout is the most confusing aspect for me. It’s an old bike to be existing alongside cellphones and texts, but I suppose my assumptions about the nature of the world could be incorrect. Or it’s simply a well maintained antique.

As a purely personal opinion about the flow of writing, I think that the last sentence of the second to last paragraph would be more clear as:

“His battered Indian Scout roared to life as he considered the hard time she’d give him for bringing the Baretta. Clinging to the past, as she’d say.”

That’s just me, though.