Comments on A Clean Slate by Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

The Ghost in the Machine LoA

Wow this is very powerful piece well done I like it. You conveyed a very intimate moment and all of the imagery and scenery surrounding it without making it too cluttered or clunky good job
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
Jessica Cahill

I love the gravity of this piece. Even though you use floaty, freeing imagery, there’s a solidity to it that I connect to.

Two very small things: In your first sentence, you have two "out"s, I would remove the second one.

First sentence of the last paragraph, perhaps change “afresh” to “anew”, I think it might read more smoothly.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
musicgirl

your descriptions paint a solemn yet beautiful picture.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
musicgirl

your descriptions paint a solemn yet beautiful picture.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
musicgirl

your descriptions paint a solemn yet beautiful picture.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
musicgirl

your descriptions paint a solemn yet beautiful picture.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.