Chilling and original! It works so surprisingly well. You say so much with so little and really let the actual sound of the words communicate as much as their meaning. Bravo!

Oh, wow, this is so different and cool. It’s like a frantic chopped up dream. I like the rules of this poem if you will, or the structure. I really like “Me us thus be” — that made me stop and mull :) Great rhymes as well. The more rhymes per square inch the better according to I.

Glad you enjoyed it. Seems to reinforce my “never resist the 2am inspiration” habit.