I want to know more.

Thanks Raeanne.

My remark had little to do with your specific comment, it’s more like a straw on my back.

I’m tired of writing stories with people responding along your lines, wanting more, wondering what’s going to happen next.

That’s not my job, it’s yours, feel free to jump right in.

Metaphor for the heart when it broken by love, i get it. :) So honor’s name has been trampled.. perhaps by a lying suitor saying she cheated..

Honour without a ‘u’ looks very odd to me. Ah! You Americans (fond tut and shake of the head). As always, a brilliant piece. Paragraph 2 paints the picture really well although I’d suggest replacing the last comma in it with ‘and’. You’re also missing a t in the ‘the’ – beginning of 4th para.

It’s a very interesting scenario: a different world, time – so much is open to speculation, and it’s definately not what I expected from the title. Expert use of language. Great job, I loved it!
Abby x

My dear Abby, A u for you.

Thanks for your wonderful critique, its greatly appreciated. I stare though my mistakes, drafts wouldn’t even help, you’re the greatest.

I even edited it a little bit, combining some of the runs.

Thanks.

Aww thank you! =) x

Love the cliff hanger. The imagery is vivid as well.

Love the cliff hanger. The imagery is vivid as well.