I like this very much. As a geek I have a soft spot for superheros.

One little suggestion, you don’t describe The Avenger’s costume, so Avenger Boy’s “outrageous outfit” has no frame of reference. (I understand that the character limit makes this difficult, but that’s the Ficly challenge, isn’t it? ;) )

Other than that, your prose is solid, your imagery is good. I’m looking forward to when you’re more comfortable with the format. Welcome to Ficly.

(Totally laughing my ass off right now!)

No disrespect to Jessica, outrageous works great for me, since outrageous is purely subjective. That’s why I’m laughing, my vision of Avenger Boy was priceless.

Ahh well, one man’s outrageous is another man’s fashionable. ;)

This is awesome. I like the idea of this dumb old superhero, whose image is only kept alive from someone who, I assume, was a fan until he met his hero in the flesh. It all has a hint of shame and self-loathing about it.

Quick technical point:
as he leaned down to pick up the purse the thief retrieved the pistol
There should probably be a comma after “and” and another after “purse”, just to correct the reading. Or maybe I’m a dipshit.

You’re totally right about the commas Wednesday, thank you! And thank you for the kind words, I’m glad you enjoyed it.