this was quite arousing…in a literal sense of course! um…uh…nicely done? oh man….

Not many sex scenes start with a man urinating, but somehow you make it work!

I concur with Sanglorian. It takes real skill to have a scene half focused on urination to be arousing. The only complaint is the opening line — a little too flowery for me. Makes it hard to enter the story right away.

Other than that, the eroticism was compelling.

I don’t know maybe its just me, but the last line just throws me off. Can’t explain why…