It’s an interesting set-up – I kept expecting things to come to a head and they never quite did so.

One thing you’ll need to be careful of is pronouns: it’s not always clear who ‘he’ is; particularly in this sentence: “The boy gave an excited smile and placed the money into his hand which he then put in his tattered tweed jacket.”

Thanks for the feedback Sang, I see what you mean. I was writing pretty quickly as I wanted to get my thoughts onto “paper” before I forgot. I just wanted it open ended for a sequel once my idea develops. I’ll see if I can fix that part you mentioned. Thanks again :)