A few grammatical mistakes (“he won’t tell” should be “wouldn’t”, etc.), also, the POV is inconsistent – sometimes it’s from David’s point of view, sometimes it’s from a 3rd person observer. But still, it’s good for a chuckle.
A few grammatical mistakes (“he won’t tell” should be “wouldn’t”, etc.), also, the POV is inconsistent – sometimes it’s from David’s point of view, sometimes it’s from a 3rd person observer. But still, it’s good for a chuckle.