If you thought of this while you were awake, strange story. If this is a dream, you did a great job. Even if it’s a dream, you still need to change the reality. Change all your language to present tense, you mix them together, like didn’t to_don’t_. I like your first sentence a lot, Normally, I wake up to see the pink candy-floss clouds resting on the grass outside my bedroom window. But this is a great example of how less is more: Normally, I wake up to pink candy-floss clouds resting on the grass outside my bedroom window. Removing see the doesn’t change the line at all. Less is more.
If you thought of this while you were awake, strange story. If this is a dream, you did a great job.
Even if it’s a dream, you still need to change the reality.
Change all your language to present tense, you mix them together, like didn’t to_don’t_.
I like your first sentence a lot, Normally, I wake up to see the pink candy-floss clouds resting on the grass outside my bedroom window.
But this is a great example of how less is more:
Normally, I wake up to pink candy-floss clouds resting on the grass outside my bedroom window.
Removing see the doesn’t change the line at all. Less is more.
I think you do a good job of communicating a blurred confusion. I’d agree with 32 Squared, though, that some of the language could be cleaned up a little.
Thanks for the advice :)
Well, I was left feeling confused but as if I wasn’t supposed to be confused. This is very impressive and intriguing.
32 ^2 
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