Lovely little allegory and certainly seems to fit well your avatar and persona. Nice poem. Really makes you think.

Quite excellent. I’ve found myself gravitating towards blank verse as well. How strange that we would be on such a similar frequency…
Refocusing, however, I would suggest making full use of punctuation within the poem. Capitalization, commas, the whole nine yards. It keeps things clear and specific, and I don’t think it detracts from the poetic experience. Unless, of course, you intentionally sacrificed punctuation to effect the continuous, stream-of-consciousness-like impression.

The poem was conceived in a stream of consciousness. I feel leaving it in this state better conveys the experience as I felt it to the reader, though I generally prefer the organizational advantages of formatting.

An odd arrangement of ownership and guest-hood. Displaced by lack of imposing one’s control over a domain.

And rather than attacking the current location, moving on to find a more welcoming place.