Comments on The Retort Usually Occurs to Me Only Hours Later by Funky Chunky

Stockholm

I love alliteration! Nicely done.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
Funky Chunky

Thanks!
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
The Ghost in the Machine LoA

I don’t know if I’m missing the point here( which to be honest is quite possible) but the first paragraph is one huge run on sentence and I’m having trouble following along.
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
Emily

I agree with Stockholm, the 4 words of alliteration are clever and fun! :)
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Funky Chunky

I’ve tried to change things for you, Ghost. Do the brackets help?
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
Ruthie

Love this story! It’s very amusing. :p
- Posted almost 8 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Anna Banner

Brilliant! made me smile X
- Posted over 7 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Anna Banner

Brilliant! made me smile X
- Posted over 7 years ago.
- 5 out of 5