This is interesting, I would like to see a sequel to get a better idea of what is going on. Were they ghosts? Is this a vision? Interesting stuff here well done.

Lovely description. I thought it read as though this person had won the battle but lost their life, with this being a description of their transition to the afterlife. Worked for me.

I think it should be “underwater palaces”, unless you mean they walked beneath palaces somehow associated with water.

Thanks guys. I’ll have to think on whether or not I’ll sequel…I honestly hadn’t intended to.

And thank THX, fix’t.

Your touch is as sure as ever, Jessica. “Salt sea spay” would have less of a veterinary flavor with the judicious inclusion of an ‘r’.

Thanks August! Fix’t. :)

Featured?

:O

And well deserved!

Beautiful imagery. I hope you don’t hate my cheeky sequel?! Maybe you should write your one before reading mine?

Felt guilty about my ‘cheeky’ sequel. So I wrote a serious one. Hope you like it.

Excellent writing! It’s a pleasure to read.