The stanza that starts with “cadavers” really had me ooing and ahhing, and then from that stanza on to the end is perfection.

I enjoyed the heaven/ destined slant rhyme, but thought that that stanza was wordy and less precisely awesome as the rest of your poem. Not really meant to cut you deep, I just want to be honest. And honestly, overall, I approve :)

Thanks. I need that critique. It’s funny that you mention it, because I do always seem to stumble over that part in my head. I’ll work something out though.

Surreal and cryptic – I’m not usually a poetry fan but I found this one interesting.