This is quite dark. I like how the tone turns bitter in the last paragraph.. leaving the reader with a sick feeling of realization of what he/she read. I will admit, this threw me off-kilter a bit when I figured out what ‘it’ was.
I had to look at the tags to make sure I reached the right conclusion. I agree with Madi, quite dark. And a pretty perfect description of how this kind of thing happens.
Ouch. I hope this is in no way autobiographical! Tremendous atmosphere here. IMHO the fist section might be a little better like this: The recipe is simple: a sour friendship and a torn heart.
madiloveszombies
In Night's Arms
mark.i.wang
Funky Chunky