Comments on freefall by Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

ElshaHawk (LoA)

yet the tomato was silent as it fell..
or is that a metaphor for the innerds..
lol nice twist at the end
- Posted over 10 years ago.
jesteram

I think you’re fudging it a bit by using tomatosauce as one word at the end there…
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

i could have used ketchup!
- Posted over 10 years ago.
ethelthefrog

Laugh out loud. Very nice, but I do agree with jesteram.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
blusparrow (LoA)

ooooooooooo, SPLATT. I am imagining this onee commerical about this screaming poker chip looking thing. I wish it would just so splatt like on this ficlet though.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Reiko516

My first thought was, “Gross!” But very evocative and effective!
- Posted over 10 years ago.
monkeybomb

I think I actually would have preferred ketchup.
- Posted over 10 years ago.