The idea is quite good – but you need to deliver so it’s appreciated for what it is.

Break it up a little with punctuation, to help the reader out. Also, generally, try to expand your word choice – you use a couple words several times (being, no matter).

Others:
" being once was, it will burn"; misspelled intelligent; “or innocent a being is, it burns all the same. Yet nothing”; last sentence needs serious TLC.

It is a fascinating thought, convincingly argued throughout the short piece. Mark has some good suggestions for how to make it even more powerful.

Thankyou for the comments. They have helped alot, and I need all the hlp I can get to become a better writer.

Took me a while, but I think I’ve sort of fixed it.