A’int no bigger regrets than smoking cigarettes. The opening made me want to walk to the store for a pack. Even though I quit more than a year ago. God damn the last line. God damn it. That’s really all I have to say… and I mean it in a good way.

*Ain’t

Great scene. " And the most tragic part of it?" is a little awkward – I don’t know what that’s called, but I think phrasing like that is typical for a single person monologue, rather than a dialogue.

It might sound more natural if it was “And that’s not the most tragic part of it.” “Really?” etc. Or something along those lines.

Great scene. " And the most tragic part of it?" is a little awkward – I don’t know what that’s called, but I think phrasing like that is typical for a single person monologue, rather than a dialogue.

It might sound more natural if it was “And that’s not the most tragic part of it.” “Really?” etc. Or something along those lines.

Great scene. " And the most tragic part of it?" is a little awkward – I don’t know what that’s called, but I think phrasing like that is typical for a single person monologue, rather than a dialogue.

It might sound more natural if it was “And that’s not the most tragic part of it.” “Really?” etc. Or something along those lines.

Last words while dangling at the edge of the world. Tragic, yet I really feel that she jumps and ends it with no regrets.

@mark, i cut it down from a larger scene and the character limit prevented me from adjusting it. it was originally a monologue.

Thanks everyone =) My first bit of prose in quite a while.

Last line was gave me chills. Excellent piece! :)

Always good to see a piece from Abby!

Great piece. The ending.. I can’t find any words to describe how I feel about the ending, really. It’s been stuck in the back of my thoughts for quite a while after reading this last Saturday.

very dark and beautiful. I’d love to see a sequel to this.

Stories like this, is why I’m here.

wow. I had to read this 2 or 3 times to let it all sink in. You really captured a powerful moment here, and painted it for us brilliantly

I liked the ending. I felt like the beginning was a little rocky with the inserted line about the smoke, or maybe that last sentence starting with “And” threw me. Overall, solid, gut-wrenching stuff, so definitely within your usual mien.