misspelled “aisle”… “but he was tired” is awkward – maybe “it’s a tired smile” or something like that.

From a plot point of view, you had several muggers in the prequel, but only one body in the dumpster. Survivors would be an interesting plot twist; but maybe you intend to keep the mystery up longer. I’m not sure which way you plan to go. I bring it to your attention only because if it is unintentional you’ll want to fix it. Otherwise, really solid.

I tried something a little different, see how that fits.

In terms of plot, I haven’t addressed the mugging/survivors yet. The folder is related to Rain and Fire and everything before that. It’s a little hard not being confusing because the stories are written far apart time wise.