Great details, the portable CD player, smell of gas, spare tire, broken speedometer, can’t see gauge unless lights off, reminds me of several cars I have driven!
The choppy sentences stylistically add to his* glazed-over reality, but it also can be distracting.

When there’s multiple things going on in the same sentence, you might want to toss in some punctuation. I found the style problems detracted from my reading – once you clean those up, it’ll have some real promise.

Thank you for all your feedback and I appreciate the pointers. It has been a long time since I have wrote anything creatively so I am little rusty.