I’m not sure how you want us to feel about the seventeen year old guy. I hated him to start with, kind of felt myself agreeing towards the end. Nice bit of dialogue. Comparing the thoughts and the speech is a great technique.
I’m not sure what to think myself. I don’t even know if this is first or second person narrative. It depends on who the reader decides to be the protagonist, I suppose.
Abby (LoA)
memento