i think you mean “tropical”; wrong you’re “you’re a piece of shit”; “as I imagined placing a knife…” is a fragment. Overall I like it – while I think you could do with a better lead in than “I wasn’t dreaming”, it’s still good as is.
i think you mean “tropical”; wrong you’re “you’re a piece of shit”; “as I imagined placing a knife…” is a fragment.
Overall I like it – while I think you could do with a better lead in than “I wasn’t dreaming”, it’s still good as is.
Abrupt.
mark.i.wang
ElshaHawk (LoA)