Descriptions are great. But to be honest, if i was just gut shot, i don’t think “before long i will sleep” is what would spring to mind. Well done

“OOOOWWWW, C**p S**t F**k that REALLY bloody hurt!!!” just doesn’t sound quite so artistic :P I was trying to represent an overwhelming calm brought about by resignation to fate, but to be fair looking at it now it does look a bit loopy and unreal…

I think this is very good. Found myself absorbed into the story.

CR*P…C*AP….*RAP…. that should clear it up a little :) thanks for the comments.