Ouch, unrequited love.

I think this could be improved a little. I got a bit confused after the you’re wrong bit. Para 6 has: …I knew she didn’t want to her.

is it ‘to her’ or ‘to hear’, if it is ‘to her’, placing it earlier in the sentence would make it clearer.

I did enjoy the story, though :)

Good little bit of dialogue. There are a few minor errors, but I think overall it’s actually quite good.

nice little piece about unrequited love. I agree with the other comments that this is a nice little piece…
Just a few of my own thoughts to add. I’m not a big fan of “ly” adverbs in conjunction with dialog. Google “ly adverbs” and you’ll see what I mean. IMHO, one of Hemmings ways greatest pieces is Hills like White Elephants . it’s 99.9% dialog, and one of the best examples for how to write amazing dialog. anyway that’s my 2 cents worth. :)