verb tense changes.. “school is… was fifteen” etc. Makes it hard to tell if this past recollection or a collection of different people.

I kind of get what you’re trying to do. The switch between present and memory is a little confusing but I think that adds to the overwhelming confusion of High School for your character.

I enjoyed the present in particular. They have a dream-like quality to them, play out as though it’s all just a fantasy. The first section of italics is written beautifully.

I’d be interested to know what you were separating with the format in case I’ve got it confused.

It’s a clever idea though. Very clever indeed and a good way to colour a character in.